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The Roman’s Defeat
As Hannibal moved his slingers and his spearmen towards the Roman armies… And then a Roman soldier shouted, “Ya come and throw your little pebbles on me,I even doubt you can kill me he he ha ha.” Just when the soldier fell to the ground dead, and the soldier next to him said, “That day Daniel died from what he called a little pebble.” Then Hannibal took his heavy Spanish cavalry on the left of the Roman armies and his Numidian cavalry on the right of the Roman armies. And then he took his spearmen and slingers away. Then a soldier shouted, “Hey, get back here you cheaters if you want to cheat come and play poker nah maybe cards or maybe blah blah blah and maybe blah and blah also maybe blah and…” “Can you shut up please I’ll die of you.” “Really that means I have super powers die everyone.” “No it was just a matter of speech.” “Charge!” shouted the leader. “But whats the point?” “Um why you ask?” “Because if you look around us we are being surrounded.” “Well then form a testudo” “Ya good Idea” “Sir sir its too late we are all surrendering to them.” “Quick Maxi since you have been with me let's escape here!”
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The Run
As they ran for their lives they met a farm and anda took to racing mountain horses.80 days later they reached Rome the capital of this great city beautiful,great,strong city and and sir can’t you see I am telling story and thank you of those words of wisdom. So in Rome they went to the palace and went to Julius Caesar, in front of his senate and they both said,”Caesar we have just been attacked by Hannibal and lost the battle, he has captured 10,000 of our soldiers.” (2 hours later.) “I do not want to be humiliated in front of my senate again!” Caesar shouted. “We must destroy them that is an order!” “Maxi I promote you centurion! Demeus Maximus I promote you to officer” Now take an army and of you go shoo shoo.”
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The Roman’s Revenge
Demeus Maximus and Maxi took a great army and it took them 80 days to get to them. Demeus Maximus and Maxi took a plan and would strike at midnight. “So first we free the prisoners and give them weapons and then we will have 100,000 soldiers instead of 90,000 and shot them down with our catapults and spears and stones and I shall kill Hannibal and Caesar shalt give me the empire.” says Maxi I have a better idea I kill Hannibal. No no no I kill Hannibal let's say we both kill Hannibal! Ya lets do this.
as they tip toed a Carthage put a fill wine bottle out. And a Roman soldier looked at it and then took it! “Sir whats the point of
10,000 and then walking back a mile why not just attack them know?” “Good idea! Lets do this, Charge!!” And then they won!
The End
Shut up, we are still telling the story! Look at the title,don’t you know how the read the title we still have one more chapter!!
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Victory
As they pitched camp Julius caesar came and asked Maxi and Demeus Maximus “Who killed Hannibal?” “I did” they both shouted and then they started fighting and as soon as they were about to kill each other they said, “Hey we both killed him!” I chopped every bit of him in half and then Maxi chopped him in half again and then we started to kick them around and invented a game called Football!!
Sorry to tell you this but it was meant to be in latin not english!!
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